What just happened ?
Here's a few pointers :D
- Work on your script, the words were basic at best and the humor was dull.
- Your plot line needs much more density, the criss-cross between scenes and the lack of full explanations ruined the flash for me.
- Speech bubbles within the flash killed the intensity by breaking up the screen, remove them next time.
- The quality of the voices need improving, the difference in their quality ruins the fluidity of the flash.
- Please work on your storyboarding to make the entire screenplay improve.
- Looping voice movements made it such a poor flash, please take more time this includes the walking.
- The entire part to do with the army KILLED the entire plot.
- All in all this was one of the worst flash movies I have ever seen, please either don't do anymore in this series or revamp this one to a higher standard and then continue.