The Fred Story

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Thats one angry dog...


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You use a lot of elements that I recognized as being in the right place at the right time. I'm not gonna say this was good, but you should ask for feedback from folks, and keep making flash. The sound you used was ok, but not always consistent, like the dog jumping down from the stool, and the first 2-3 steps he took, but not the rest. Get some voice actors. Parents, friends, clergy, hobos...that sort of thing. Doesn't matter what they sound like, as long as they have uniquely identifiable voices. I also noticed that at times some of the pauses were a bit long, which made this hard to watch. Last thing...the intro...I thought that was the whole flash, as many others probably thought as well. Fortunately, I'm a patient person and gave you the benefit of the doubt. I would decrease the pause between the intro and the "8 hours earlier" message so people don't blam you without giving consideration to the whole flash. That's it, keep up the good work.

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2.93 / 5.00

Jul 15, 2010
5:49 PM EDT
Comedy - Original