I thought it was adorable and cute. ^.^
Good but needs improving
Ok first off, good job on your first try at this, you do have some skills so welcome to the portal, now as for the art work its notbad, and not sure which program you are using but i do think that there is lacking some quality in the artwork, it alsmost looks like its from ms paint, a more better program might be paintshop pro to edot your artwork then back into the flash program now you have put the effort and the animation is ok but at times it seems too slow, so speed up the animation abit, and again ad those subtitles it will greatly help to flow along with your story here, the whole animation was pretty cute, but i thought, it was way too short and more material and content should be added, you do have something with the story but you need to vring all these elements together to make it all flow well together, so i stated a few tips here and there and i hope to see more of your work improved ofcourse, so hope your next entry is much better good luck on your future stuff.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
The prom you use for editing art can make a big differance something to think about there, also some "SUBTITLES" could be used,
Cute but abit on the short side.
Thank you very much i did spend alot of time on this flash and yes i know it is alot shorter then i would have liked but i value your opinion LOL the art work was orgianally drawn on a peice of paper then scanned and then painted usind ms paint ....... i will have to exsperiment with photo shop more ... and as for sub title i fully agree in using them next time thank you very very much for your review and your critism is greatly appreciated and i will most def take what you have said into effect and exspirement around much more
If you hadnt said this was your first flash i would have believed it the work of a decent flash artist with some time of experience due to its unique style.
thank you so much you are very kind lol but i am not very exsperienced thank you so much for your review
Good job for a first attempt!
Very good for a first attempt! Though, with the thought clouds, I would have replaced them with subtitles, or make them not take so long to appear. But good job, considering it was your first!
Considering this is your very first...
It's much better than some I have seen. It has a nice visual aesthetic as well. Keep going, and you'll get better with more experimenting. It's good to see an actual plot as well!
Thank you very very much