WOW this is actually really deep!
Obviously you worked really hard on the script, it shows! Reminds me of Neon Genesis Evangellion quite a bit. Anyways I guess my criticism would be that with such a good script you want voice actors to accentuate this depth. Also if there was a little more time taken in the drawings this would be just about perfect!
Despite this being an incomplete flash, i really loved it. It was both moving, and humorous. I really enjoyed watching this, and would LOVE to see a finalized version some day. Happy Lock Day sir.