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May 26, 2010 | 3:21 PM EDT

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My response to Lock Day. In warning, it's about 4 minutes long

I learned a lot from this project. Like, I suck at keeping to a schedule. Voice actors don't always turn in their lines; have a backup ready. Aaaand... I suck at animating. Pretty much, this entire video is a complete failure except for the script, which in itself is mediocre at best. Oh, and the music. The music is not mine, so of course it's BA!

EDIT 1: Credited one voice actor and increased the quality of the sound.



Rated 4 / 5 stars

Incomplete, but well-written.

In spite of the incomplete animation and crappy sound quality, this is one of the better written flash movies around. What's even more surprising that this is from a member of the Lock Legion. I'm not going to let the Clock/Lock deal affect your score because I don't mind the Clock Crew or the Lock Legion as long as they produce good material and annoy the shit out of others. With that out of the way...

In terms of graphics, you are obviously in need of a few books on anatomy and animation. While the characters are better-drawn than what Rhete, Jerry Jackson, or Doug Sauncy (the Keegan's Truck guy); I think you could improve on your proportions a bit and the incomplete animation prevent this from getting a ten from me. In terms of sound, I like the songs from the Audio Portal you chose, which set a fitting mood I might add. Plus, the voice acting is great. However, I have to agree with Sir Davey (who happens to be a personal favorite of mine) on the sound quality. In terms of content, this is how an original cartoon on here should be done. You have a solid script and great diolog, unlike many high-rated cartoons which have above-average to excellent graphics, but lackluster to lame story, sub-par to inept directing, and weak diolog. If you go back and finish up the actual graphics and animation, you'll be set for greatness.

What I do like:
-Great script
-Great voice acting
-Good sound selection
-Respectable direction

What I don't like:
-Unfinished animation
-The sound quality on the voices needs improvement.

Overall: I see much potential from you as a writer, but your drawing and animation skills are in need of work. Here's an eight out of ten for what you have so far.

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Rated 4 / 5 stars


That was pretty good but tell your voice actors to use a de-esser filter.


Rated 4 / 5 stars

Good :D

It may be poorly animated graphically, but the plot is awesome, you could try adding colour and lip syncing in the future, like the colour you had at the start, but this is good, nice work :D, i think it could do without the text if it was all voice acted, but thats my opinion :D


Rated 5 / 5 stars


this movie is ok 4/5 why did you rush it, you could have uploading it tomorrow, it's ok if you where 1 day late with this movie :) keep up the good work.


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars


should fear when your characters gains a life of its own.
deciding for it self, things you wont normally do. when you say, what whould this character do, and not what you want it to do,