It's good, but...
It's original, which is good. It's mysterious and kinda scary. Like Tetrominon said, however, the dialogue isn't that great. There are several punctuation and comma errors, and the entire sentence build-up could be improved drastically on several places. I'd suggest you find someone to proofread everything. In my opinion, bad grammar completely destroys the game experience, no matter how good the game is.
The graphics are good, and the animation is great. Not a big fan of the wannabe-sci-fi detail where characters have one glowing eye, but I could always look past that, I guess.
All in all, it's good, but you need to improve the grammar. And if, for some reason you want to very very much, please remove Sgt. Aya's glowing eye. :)