Short and a little crude
I think that it's a decent practice piece, which shows that you're willing to learn the tools that go with this fine program. You could certainly use subtitles, as this piece doesn't have the loudest voice acting and as a result, I found myself turning up the volume to hear the voices, only to have my ears raped by the sound of the gunfire. Balance is the key.
With the animation and drawing, you could use a little more time there, meaning zooming in and possibly using a smaller tool, to give a greater degree of control over what you're drawing, so that when you zoom out, it looks more rounded and a better quality image.
The shop keeper standing behind the counter, was he a midget, or was there something else there that I missed? It didn't seem right. Also, you don't need to drop hints like "This flash deserves a 5", as it's not even a subliminal message. More work on the animation will bring its own reward for you :)
Finally, with the change that hits the counter, perhaps just make it a denomination that is recognisable, as opposed to writing "change" on it. Why not have the voice actor do an impression of Home Alone's archive footage film, with the line "You can keep the change, you filthy animal"?
I look forward to seeing what else you can produce.
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thanks for the great advice, but this was really somthing i did today to keep me busy and for a laugh, i do usally put more effort into my flash, cheers for the review
That was well cool.
I liked his crossbone top. Super cool!
No, it doesn't.
"This flash deserves 5"? I don't think so. It's short, boring, and unnecessary. It lacks any entertainment value.
LOL zero a bit harsh enit
it was just a joke
As far as animation quality goes, not a bad job. But the animation itself...
Honestly, I don't really get what you were going for. I'm guessing you wanted it to be some thing violent with a cool punchline, but the problem was the punchline didn't make any sense in the situation. Keep the change for what? Generally, in a situation like this, the murderer should have gone to the register with an item from the store, and when the cashier named the price, he'd get his head blown off. The punchline being that the slug in his head is his change. I didn't get what this guy's change was about. Well, I guess that's my 2 cents.
what do you mean as far as animation quality goes not a bad job,
its Disgusting animation, oh and its meant to be a joke
this needs a lot of work
the animation wasn't very good, and the voices were recorded so badly i could barley make out what they were saying. it was also very short, not long enough to really build a plot or let the viewer get an idea of what exactly was going on.
lol i know