Story becomes clearer

YAY, more colours!

It's nice that you introduced some more colours into this piece. And it was even so subtle that I only realized that something was different, but I couldn't really tell what it was. Then I noticed the green colours. :)

The story begins to become clearer now, which is nice. I also learn to distinguish the characters in the story, which also helps a lot to understand what is going on, heh.

However, in the lower right corner there was some overlay from Newgrounds. I guess it is part of the ad system, but it didn't seem to work properly for me. There was an overlay the whole time, reaching a bit into the panel and even covering one word in one panel (luckily, it was only the name "Colin", so nothing too important missed here)..
I don't know if this was just happening for me or if it does happen for others as well, but it might be worth to have a look at the ads system again.

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Awesome.

Yay, number 4! It'll be interesting to see how you can tie up all (or maybe just most) of the loose ends of this chapter in these next two episodes without it sounding to long-overdrawn-explanation-y. Because you answered a lot of questions with the last episode, but opened up a whole set of new ones at the same time, so I'm hoping to see a few of those cleared up here.

On the first run-through, I can see a lot of improvements from last time; the speech bubbles kind of come in one after the other, so your eyes know what parts to read first so the story flows well together, and there's no obviously noticeable typos in the speech, which is nice, because it means crazy grammar pedants like myself can enjoy the rest of the story, xD Though I did pick up on three which my mind feels obliged to tell you about:

"And the man with the serpents smile..."--There should be an apostrophe in serpent's.
"Mason left, and Malik, and I were left in the hands..."--You don't need the comma between 'Malik' and 'and I'
"Now 3 decades later, I'm at Masons door"--There should be an apostrophe in Mason's.

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Anyway. Still really liking the artwork! The way it's mostly black-and-white, but with the odd splashes of colour in the red blood and green uniforms kinda gives it this dark film noir edge that I really like. It also makes me think that maybe in the future (Perhaps the third chapter?) you could play with colour a little bit more, maybe even have some of the more crucial scenes in near-full colour, or completely devoid of it. Though I do really like this current aesthetic; it almost forces you to focus on the more gory aspects because your eye goes straight for the colour...which tends to be the colour of someone's open throat or something equally as delightful. The drawing between the panels does seem to vary more than somewhat, but it's not incredibly detrimental to the flash as a whole; the entire scenario's a little messed up and jagged, so I don't see why the drawing can't sometimes reflect the harsh mania of the reality.

The development of the storyline was really nicely done. It starts tying everything together; how they all met, why everyone's out to get Mason, why Malik is so very disfigured...
Though it does make me wonder. Scissors do seem to be the weapon of choice; with the man in the first episode, and with Malik here...they both seem to be going for the nose as well...perhaps there is a connection between the two? I almost get the feeling that Colin's going to be looking at an enemy who's not all quite there...but I guess that will (hopefully) be revealed in the chapter conclusion. This was probably one of my favourite parts of this chapter though, purely for the story arcs of it and how things have started to fall into place for the conclusion...though DAMN YOU for making another cliffhanger! :P You HAD to leave it right there, didntcha?

Anyway, I'll end my ramble there. Still very much enjoying this, looking forward to the conclusion of this and the beginning of chapter 3!

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Creepy

I really liked this one, it's my fav. part of the serie, the chapter answered some questions for me, like the explanation of why Malik's face is totally weird and deformed...

The story is very well elaborated, you had criativity to make an entertaining story, I loved the serie, since it's very creepy, well executed and it's very difficult to understand, what only makes the story even cooler...

Like Fro said before, I'd love to see the 3 acts in 3 submissions, since we'll understand the story better, because it has names, and sometimes i don't remember who are the characters... We all are excited with the end of the serie, I expect an awesome end, man. Keep it up w/ the good work!!

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Roger

Dark prequel

A very macabre piece, with some additional information on the background of the characters, which gives a very much more clear image of what's going on with the protagonists - this sort of traumatic instance has probably lead to him suffering from some form of Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder.

I think that the drawing still requires refining, as the changes in the style are still too great over the panes. When you show the characters drawn almost perfectly on one shot, then the next it shows them as a mess of lines, there is something a little iffy with it all.

Still, it was nice to see a little more colour in there - perhaps it is time to make the piece full colour?

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

You've really improved with your style man! It's much neater and you've done a great job at taking our criticism. I currently wouldn't change your style any more. In your earlier submissions you started out a bit sloppy, but with it there was your distinct personal style. You made it much neater, but kept your style and that's what it's all about. Great job!

~ Story/Content ~

Woah, this one was awesome. It really answers quite a bit of questions that I had from previous submissions and was just an awesome part to the series. I actually loved this one.

You did a much better job at the speed in which the text bubbles come in and I knew exactly what I was suppose to read first. Be careful with that ad on the bottom though because in one part it actually covered some of your text up.

What I would really like to see in this series is how it all fits together in one read. When you are done with it why don't you put them all together and submit it? The file size shouldn't be too big and I would really enjoy reading these in one go so the story isn't forgotten.

~ Audio ~

I liked the music like usual. It really worked with this story well and even gave me some chills. Nothing really to add to this as there isn't really much you could add with nose in the submission. Perhaps sound effects are something to play around with and you can see if it's better with or without them.

~ Overall ~

My favorite one in the series and I would love to see this as one entire submission someday. Keep up the great work. :)

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