"i made this beacuse my last flash vid i did got in the graveyar so i bet this wont"
Are you retarded?
Animation sucked ass, art not bad, but it was pointless and there is very little story and no plot, "i c u keel mah dad" "yep" "lol u weak" "im sry i disiponted u dad" so did your 3 year old brother write the story and plot? this is worse than the other son's revenge where the son just beats his dad and kills him for... not very much, when i watched that i was like, what did he divorce or what? let me just say this "You shoot like a fag son"
Too short, bad grammar, virtually unentertaining. Not Trying to be mean or anything, but it (in my eyes) was the truth. It was early 2010 though, I'll check out your latest flash.
i agree with him. vvv
it's not bad.
but it certainly could be better.
i loved the music choice, rise against is perfect for a story like this.
make it longer, improve the grammar, and do voiceovers or speech bubbles, and i'll come back, and i'm cerain it will be well worth a five vote and a ten rating.
Short, but well done.
You honestly surprised me greatly. It was well put together, and the art style seemed to help it greatly. I think you have some real potential, but you definately need some practice.
Obviously, longer would be better.
Also, spellcheck would help greatly as well, and for the speech, put it in speech bubbles or go for voiceovers.
I think if you could expand upon this, you could have a real winner, unfortunately, this falls squarely into the average category. Good luck, mate.
grave to be dug
ok animation and use real words instead of lol or actually put the entire word you its not that hard and for goodness sakes make it long enough so if i blink its not over