but its not worthy of front page
keep up the good work
Thanks for the score, hopefully the next one will be front page worthy :D
it was pretty sweet
I like the painted background very classical
Thanks. They started off as concept art, but they were too nice (compared to my previous work) to leave out of the final thing.
I'm won't lie, the animation was pretty good and i liked the story, but you we're lacking in a bit of literary skill, like (for example) saying 'bound in undeath', I don't think that really works, as undeath isn't really a word to start with, and it sounds kind of 'wannabe goth/nerd' if you know what I mean. Also, at the start, you said 'about of' which doesn't make sense. It would be 'I know much about Jaque's life' or 'I know much of Jaque's life', not both in the same sentence. Last of all, it would have been nice to put the end rather than just leaving us with a white screen and music playing suggesting that the story is still going, which (as I eventually found it, it wasn't.
So there you have it, that's my opinion. Sorry for being such a grammar nazi but that's life. You make a flash movie, you gotta be ready for criticism, good or bad.
I have to admit, the captions became a last-minute thing, so the typos were unintentional, and I'm still surprised that "of" was left in there.
As far as the use of the word undeath, I can proudly say I was going for the nerd audience there, as it is a common fantasy term.
Lastly, the ending (or lack thereof) was rushed as well, so I apologize for that. The next version will be cleaned up and more fleshed out.
Thank you for your input.
la nuit (the night).. pretty good & attractive title!