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I was really looking forward to the next episode of this, so yay that I now get two to review! :P

Firstly, what I liked: Again, the artwork is really awesome. It feels even more maniacal than last time, which gives the panels an even more macabre and desperate twist to them; everything about them is just...unsettling. Which, given the genre you're working in, is a definite plus. I can't remember whether I mentioned this last time, but I love the format these episodes are in, the sort of pseudo-comic book style. It allows people to progress at their own speed (Great when you're trying to review it), and the static nature of it also just makes it even more creepy. Before I get onto the criticisms...know I really liked this. And some of the stuff I'm mentioning I'm mentioning because this would have been a 10 without.

The typos. Ahh, the typos were really irksome. Forgive me, I'm a little neurotic when it comes to grammar, and it's irritating to see that something as trivial and fixable as grammar/spelling isn't completely right. Here's the ones I picked up:

In the frame where his radio goes off, he says "This is important so I come by your office..."
Should be "This is important so I'll come by", or "so I will come by..."
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When he's having the phonecall with Bateman, he says "I wan't $2000". Want has no apostrophe. Same thing two frames later.
"...And I have some pictures of a really f*cked up murder, you might be interested in"
There's no need for a comma, if you're going to put one in there it should be "...f*cked up murder, you might be interested in THEM"
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In the frame starting "Things work differently here than they do in Duram...", there's about five typos alone.
First, unless you're talking about a fictional place, Durham is spelt thusly.
'Carrer suicide' should be 'career suicide'
"thier surviving kin", should be THEIR surviving kin.
"That need to bury a son, duaghter..." should be DAUGHTER
"regardless what they've done" should be regardless OF what they've done.
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"Sad to see your one of them" should be YOU'RE one of them.
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You're doing yourself a disservice on something that's completely remediable with a proof-read, and I think it's a shame because it's not as if you're lacking in the more complex realms of artwork or storyline.

That being said, I was in two minds about the speech bubbles being animated...I can't remember them being so last time and I'm not sure if it helps or detracts from the creepy feeling. That aside, the positioning of the speech bubbles and the way that, if two were on the screen, they both came up at once, didn't help. Half the time I read the wrong speech bubble first and got confused. Having them go left to right or right to left is fine, but just keeping it consistent throughout would be a major help, because it kept seeming to switch.

The plotline itself was fine; this lacked a lot of the action your former one did, although had a major cliffhanger right at the end...I think if anything, that could have been built up to even more than it was, but then again, that final frame is very ominous-looking and generally just...foreboding. Chilling. Awesome. Like I want a copy of that frame to keep as a picture, awesome.

All in all...great artwork, good storyline. Have quarrels with the speech bubble positions, irked about the typos, but yet again I find myself wanting to watch the next episode. Which I'm doing right now. Sorry for the ramblesome review. xD

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Unbelievably good...

Brilliant work. Sure its not much to look at in terms of graphics and its not too much of a complicated series of animations, but the story sure makes up for it.

Ever since the first episode ive been going through these comics over and over again, cos i just cant let them go. The dark atmosphere uve set up is beyond amazing and the storyline, even though u havent shown too much of it yet, is already fantastic.

The music also helped a lot in setting up the creepy atmoshpere, and it sort of took me to a dark place where the sun never shines and evil is just a way of life.

Overall, fantasic work on bascially every term. Nice work.

Darklight17
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Good

Really good episode this time. It's quite long so we have a lot to read, which is nice.

There are some issues though that bothered me. The scene where Simon is talking with Bateman on the cell phone and then his partner shows up. The change between the panels is too sudden. Maybe you should put in another panel where his partner shows up and witnesses that Simon wants to sell the pictures, it wouldn't be as irritating this way.

Also there where some spelling mistakes in here. It's always annoying to see those in a submission as they could easily be avoided if you proof read the text (or show it to someone else so they could proof read it).

Anyway, this a very good chapter.

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Nice!!

Man, I have nothing to say about the series, it simply rocks!!!

You make a nice work, an interesting story with heavy horror touches, the perfect things for me, since I love horror movies and creepy stories, and this one is a real horror story man... It's super well-made, you made a real hypnotizing thing, congrats...

The painting is awesome, too, fits really well to the concept, your drawing would be bad in a comedy movie, but for a horror, man it rocks!!

This episode really explained a lot of things for me, I wanna see the rest of the series, man, don't disappoint me!!

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Roger

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I like the menu, and the comic is well done as well. I remember reviewing another one of these a while ago, and this is pretty similar. I like how the speech bubbles pop up, it gives it a sort of sense that what you've made wouldn't fare better on paper, and should be a flash. I think the text is nice and stylized, but it can be a bit hard to read, and that could be a killer for a comic.

Honestly, I think the stylized nature of the drawing helps your score tremendously, as there's little to no backgrounds, the people can appear a little odd at points, and generally, things just look a little odd. But that's how it's supposed to look. I guess I really just don't like the style all that much. It's not bad, but I prefer readable with detailed backgrounds, characters, etc. Don't worry, my preferences didn't hurt your score ;).

I think the look you go for really does work well at points though, at times it look fantastic. I can't really comment on the plot too much, because I think I'm in the middle of it, but it seemed to me to be well done. Excuse the disjointed nature of this review man, I was reading the comic and stopped to write something every few panels. This really is good work man, good luck.

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