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Exile Preliminary 4

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Aww shit, this is where it's at now! And i put the finishing touches on it too! Check those credits! Those are sick credits!

Alot of work was avoided once again by doing less work and having shittier scenes, but there were a few scenes there that just ROCKED your world! Like that ship-debris falling scene? BAM.

All in all, pretty cool, i was taking this thing super seriously before but now that i can see it being what it is... i totally don't wanna remake this anymore. But rather continue with "Ex5" with all my insightful eyes and college informed brain. So we'll see...

Cool, see ya! Maybe now i'll review patchman in the commentary box.

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When is the rest of the episodes going to be uploaded to Newgrounds. Ihate to see a good job go to waste all for nothing. YOU TRULY ARE A MASTER OF STORYTELLING. THE STORY MUST GO ON.

RiverJordan responds:

It will, currently i'm writing it as a book which is between 1 and 200 pages long. When it's done it'll probably be 4 or so. I've got a lot going on :P

One of My Favorites!

I wish there was some way I could download these!!! XD

Now THIS is a well deserved Daily Feature!

Oh wow awesome work man! Markedly improved quality between each chapter. It's only a matter of time (practice lol) that your quality will rival that of mainstream anime movie quality.

I'm also digging the story. Got me into it big time. Its so rare for a flash movie in NG to really hook me deep like this.

You got something REALLY GOOD HERE

Kudos and keep on making this great story shine.
5/5 - 10/10

RiverJordan responds:

I like this review!

good improvement.

The voice-overs got much better. It still needs more work, you need to add more emotion! Not necessarily raising your voice, but a lot more passion, they need to sound fluid.
Don't just read the character's lines, imagine yourself as the character, having their personality traits, their value systems. When pretending you are a certain character, ask yourself: when I hear someone say something a certain way, how does that sound to me?
What's my disposition to them, what's going on around me? Is he attacking/strengthening me with words? Do I even know he's trying to? And what tone and strength do I want to reply with to get the right message across?

RiverJordan responds:

Yeah, people have been telling me this over and over and i always just kinda passed it off to the voice actors, who didn't care, and sent it back, and i was like "oh yeah, that's better".

Good review.

You're going places!

I've just started watching this series, and I have to say, your animation and proportions really improved. The only prob I have is that at certain parts, the voices cut off a little too early. But, besides that, awesome job!

RiverJordan responds:

Thanks man, I'm glad people are watching this!