Let´s take a look
1. Grammar: work on it
2.Movement: it looked mork like a story book
3. audio: come on!! add some music brotha, get our groove on!
4.Fluency your frames need more movement. in other words.. ADD MORE FRAMES!!!!
oh by the way i love your story. and dont let haters bring you down!!!
wow, thanks :), i'll do my best, and im happy you liked it, be on the look cuz max super is invading newgrounds!!! xD
it's not really animation.
the art isn't bad though.
and i like that you alteast added a story to it.
It was ok. There was hardy any sound, color, background, or movement. The story is sort of interseting though. If you work on your animation you can get a soild series
thanks, that's the idea, i got a lot of comics that im planning to enter into flash so yeah i hope people like them, thanks ^^
I can appreciate your enthusiasm on story telling, and your liking to invent your own characters and tell a story.. But the drawings.. haha as you refer yourself, "not much of a Picasso drawn". Your grammar could improve too, but that doesn't matter as much as the rest. As for the animation, I'm not gunna hate because it wasn't good, I assume you are a beginner on flash and just figuring things out, so I only encourage you to go on and do more.
Good luck with your future projects! And remember, practice makes perfect.
wow thanks, i really apreciate it, and yeah i will practice more :)
I like it but you should have made music to the introduction the music afterwards is nice and i think Max Super is a funny name!
xD thanx, yeah i was supposed to put music on but i forgot ¬¬