This is a music video parody based off of the song 21 guns by Green Day. Story was written by monoflauta and voices were done by Fro. His girlfriend was suppose to do the female voice, but she didn't have the time so he was stuck doing both.
Needs more scnes
The graphics were pretty impressive,, the "VOICES" were not half bad, i really came to enjoy such a pleasent video and you did very well with the art, and some animation, but this lacked in other scnes i like what you did just wish it had much more effort in taking it into more differant scnes and backrounds
As said it needs to be taken into much more other scenes
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oks thanks a lot for the review... in our next flash you will see all the things you are asking :p
Too little animation
Man, this piece got to be annoying after a while, listening to Fro's high pitched attempt to make the female voice was a little cringe-worthy, but after all, there was a decent reason to carry on watching. I carried on, hoping to see some animation there, as opposed to just the guy getting shot in the back. Not having seen the video for 21 Guns, I probably couldn't appreciate it enough, but there you go.
With how it all presented itself, you could have given subtitles, to assist people's understanding of the female voice (sorry, Fro) I think that more could have been done on the colour scheme, which was bland and pretty unimaginitive. Sure, if you want to parody the video, why not show us how you think it should have been made? Did the conversation really drown out the entirety of the song? If it did, you could do with showing us how the music video should really have gone.
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"With how it all presented itself, you could have given subtitles, to assist people's understanding of the female voice (sorry, Fro)"
it wasnt his fault, i told him to make it if he could because her girlfriend didnt want to.
And yeah thanks for another view of the video because you give at least more ideas :P many reviews didnt make that
Thanks for reviewing.
Subtitles would be nice
Well, the female voice is pretty hard to understand at times, so it would be nice to have subtitles here for a better understanding.
Most of the jokes are pretty funny, though a little more animation would do the flash pretty good. The characters are just standing there motionless, even when the guy is hit in the back he doesn't even blink, heh.
Also a few more details in the background would be nice. The flash gets pretty boring to look at after about 30 seconds, because you've already seen it all in that time. ^^
And I think a few sound effects would be nice. Gunfire for example. I didn't even know what was happening there until one of the characters mentioned something about shots.
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Ok thanks for the reviews
Yeah it looks like the animation was a problem, the sound effects and the guns :P but well thanks for reviewing.
Pretty funny
The voice was just really distracting though, I kept laughing everytime I heard it and couldn't follow the conversation as well. It would be much better with an actual female doing the voice, cause otherwise I just keep picturing you doing that voice lol.
I'm kind of wondering what the purpose of those three lights changing colors was? Doesn't seem to fit well, but neither does the random white dots in the back. Also would suggest making them do more than just stand there like that, but that might be what you were going for too I'm not sure.
Just really funny voice Fro. lol
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The fact that the only bit of the characters that seems to move are the mouths is quite unnatural, and the lip syncing in general is off. In a way, it kind of contributed to the humour of the piece, but I still think there could have been a little more animation in general. Or if not animation, then a bit more detailing; the background's pretty plain and I could work out what the flashing lights were until the mention of the police. And couldn't work out for the life of me where the bullets were coming from because the guy seemed to be bleeding from his back but the holes seemed to be coming from the side...though I guess that's not very important. I think the simplicity of the animation helped you a little, but at the same time it could definitely have brought the entire thing up if there was a little more animation.
I think in general it was perhaps a little longer, but that might have been due to the lack of visual variation, so I found myself just sat listening to the dialogue. Though the dialogue itself was pretty funny. The lines about the 5cm, 'Uzbek language', the Romeo and Juliet, the wedding were all nicely delivered. The jokes later on kind of fell a little, but that probably had more to do with the fact they were a little more outside my humour and because the flash in general was dragging a little.
In short, the animation of this brought it down and the humour brought it up. I think even a little more visual movement would have helped improve this a LOT, because although the jokes in general are funny, the fact the screen is so static is a semi-major flaw. In general though, this has a lot of potential, so definitely keep at it.
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"The fact that the only bit of the characters that seems to move are the mouths is quite unnatural, and the lip syncing in general is off."
Yes that it was because i tryed to make it by as :p it would look more natural and better if i would did it by another way but i wanted to try it :p
"And couldn't work out for the life of me where the bullets were coming from because the guy seemed to be bleeding from his back but the holes seemed to be coming from the side"
The bullets where coming from a lots of places :P you couldnt see the ones that hit him in the back because they wherent in the stage :P a house has most of time 4 walls :P haha
"Though the dialogue itself was pretty funny. The lines about the 5cm, 'Uzbek language', the Romeo and Juliet, the wedding were all nicely delivered. The jokes later on kind of fell a little, but that probably had more to do with the fact they were a little more outside my humour and because the flash in general was dragging a little."
Haha thanks :p i wrothe them and yes maybe with a better animation they would be more funnier :p thanks a lot :P
"In short, the animation of this brought it down and the humour brought it up. I think even a little more visual movement would have helped improve this a LOT, because although the jokes in general are funny, the fact the screen is so static is a semi-major flaw. In general though, this has a lot of potential, so definitely keep at it."
Oks thanks a lot for the review :D