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The fact that the only bit of the characters that seems to move are the mouths is quite unnatural, and the lip syncing in general is off. In a way, it kind of contributed to the humour of the piece, but I still think there could have been a little more animation in general. Or if not animation, then a bit more detailing; the background's pretty plain and I could work out what the flashing lights were until the mention of the police. And couldn't work out for the life of me where the bullets were coming from because the guy seemed to be bleeding from his back but the holes seemed to be coming from the side...though I guess that's not very important. I think the simplicity of the animation helped you a little, but at the same time it could definitely have brought the entire thing up if there was a little more animation.
I think in general it was perhaps a little longer, but that might have been due to the lack of visual variation, so I found myself just sat listening to the dialogue. Though the dialogue itself was pretty funny. The lines about the 5cm, 'Uzbek language', the Romeo and Juliet, the wedding were all nicely delivered. The jokes later on kind of fell a little, but that probably had more to do with the fact they were a little more outside my humour and because the flash in general was dragging a little.
In short, the animation of this brought it down and the humour brought it up. I think even a little more visual movement would have helped improve this a LOT, because although the jokes in general are funny, the fact the screen is so static is a semi-major flaw. In general though, this has a lot of potential, so definitely keep at it.
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