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Teeny and the Cloud

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"Teeny" is based off of a doll I got when I was really little (a Kennel Kuddlee). I never outgrew using her to create weird and goofy stories, and when I had to do a Flash project of some short story for a college class, I came up with this. Sorry for the shoddy Flash work; I'll try to do better in the future! =)

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good work

very simple but the graet nevertheless..
bg music is funny, I liked it too :)



Cute, Funny, and Short

Very simple, very short, and certainly entertaining! The animation was quite smooth, and the art style you use is very suitable for this sort of project. I enjoy how you leave us with nothing but the cute Teeny and her shocked expression as you can hear a heavy storm ruining her perfect sunny day on the beach. Keep up the good work!



Failing

Your movie is ok, but there are a lot of places for improvement.

~First, you need more shots. For example, when grabbing and throwing the coconut, perhaps go into first person view of the dog doing it.

~The music shouldn't continuously loop through the whole animation. You should change it up or take away all noise to add to a moment (like a changing shot).

~When the dog looks sideways, it looks weird. You should show its head from the side.

~To show the cloud is blocking the sun, you can add shadow on the ground where the dog is lying down.

Now, there are things you did well.

~You have a play button and replay button.

~You have music and sound affects.

~ The flash quality (except the dog) was good because of the type of flash it is. It reminds me of a greeting card, if it was different, I would expect the water in the back to be moving, and the sun to be more detailed, and wind to be blowing the palm tree.

Overall it is a decent flash. Maybe next time you can make a longer one with a story about the dog being adopted from a kennel and making a family happy or something.


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2,650
Votes
226
Score
3.14 / 5.00

Uploaded
Feb 12, 2010
2:16 PM EST
Genre
Comedy - Original
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