The music in this is strangely quite unique yet enchanting, overall I thought the sound quality was amazing however with your visuals I think you've simply over complicated the drawings because they make the whole animation far too fast, I think you should just stick to one or two colors but even if you dont I still think you'll make an amazing flash artist. One other thing, please put subtitles in and please explain the story in length preferably using over 3000 words to express the story properly. Good work.
I was about to point out all the things I didn't like in this flash until I read that this is actually just a storyline board. I hope the actual one is 10 times better than this. :D