Look, I know this site taught it was okay but...
But don't make sprite movies. And for god's sake, don't make animations about your fanfics. It's never as good as you think it is.
As for the movie itself, the text subtitles look awful, Most of the time, the subtitles don't even align, and putting them in an mspaint box makes them look even worse.
You have a lot of work to do, and this is your sixth episode? Go back, read some books on animation and flash, and don't come back until you've stopped using sprites in your flash animation and have found some good voice actors.