Well the jokes were humorous.
I think the main flaw behind this was that the jokes were too far apart. It seemed like there were a lot of parts where nothing at all seemed to happen. The jokes themselves actually weren't too bad and I actually kinda liked the animation. I think it's important that you bring your own style to your work and I'd say you did that fairly well cause I've never seen a video quite like this before. So to sum up this review: keep it short, keep it simple, and keep the jokes a rollin'.
yeah true...my mind is not "100% original"
but im trying my best...
thanks for the review & 6 ^^
Bare with me...
I usually mark animations down based on how many bad points they had. So here they are (and I marking this to the same standard as every other animation so that you may improve if you decide to make future animations):
1) The intro was too long and boring and thus made me lose some interest straight away.
2) The animation itself wasn't good, it's something you can improve on though, some character drawings show potential.
3) The voice acting wasn't good and I could barely hear them, could be solved by tweaking, buying a new mic and experimenting with new voices.
4) Crackling sounds annoyed me (Again I guess that comes down to mic quality)
5) I didn't laugh. I guess you could improve by using fedback from animations like this to decide what the audience want.
6) The storyine was not gripping for me, a short animation can go on without making sense and keep people gripped, but when an animation is this long it needs a good story base.
7) The animation dragged on for too long (as said above unless you have solid content to put in the animation keep it short).
That put aside I'm sure you had fun making it! I hope in the future you can produce some good comical animations. I think short, silly, random animations would be your style!
i gave you a 5 cause it had alot fo famous NG guys how did u get them to do this flash?
i mean really
all thanks to jaxxy :D
she contacted arin & josh ^^
really funny. not the best animation but good.(yey edds here!)
8 because of mispelling and the animation was a bit bad,overall good