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Meh Firth Time With Buttons

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Meh

Animations wasn't very good. The wheels on the car especially. The loop of the buildings on the car part could have been a bit smoother, too. Also, if you watch it again the credit music plays over everything else. If you practice you could be great.

Needs more practice

There are a few ingredients that make a Flash look really well done in other peoples' eyes, which, as you may see, is lacking in this one. First, and probably the most important is time dedication. And we're not talking about something like done in a day or two, but more like weeks, or perhaps months. Alot you say? I know! But that's what it may take to make something awesome. Perhaps, though, this Flash looks awesome to your perspective because its yours and its something to be proud of. Maybe....... I don't know, I can't assume too much.

Anyways, another important thing to a REALLY successful Flash is putting your guts to it. Patience and brains is another key factor. Sometimes when I try to figure out a how to make something work out, I bust my brain. So, is the solution is to simply try to simplify the work or try to substitute it in some other way? Well, it may be the better choice. But here's what I do. I totally detach myself from monitor and think it over. How can I solve this? Is there a way to get around this situation? Maybe I need an alternative that will be suitable.

But ultimately, you need to enjoy Flash (which I assume you do) in order to do the above. Now, about the movie, these are the things that needs improvement: jokes and graphics (especially if they are your own). It would also be nice if your animation was a bit more too. Please don't take it too personally what I said, but rather suggestions and advice. If you got talent, then use it to your full capacity! Just make sure it doesn't take all your time away!

Keep working on it

I understand you are learning, but put more thought into a submission before you put it on the site for other people to look at. Buttons worked fine, but the animation, artwork and voice work NEEDS work. Keep learning about flash and make sure you think through your creations before submitting

timoku responds:

Yeah My Sis Said That I'll Try Better

Eh...

I really didn't like it, it does seem like you did not think of the plot while making this you should of used a bit better graphics and also this was kind of stupid.

timoku responds:

sorry

not bad

but you could use some better art. it's great you got in to buttons and all but none of that is going to matter if you don't put more time and effort in to your art.
also you need to tighten up your comedy a little. Right now it's loos and hardly funny. I kind of like the pokeball skit, but the voice in it kind of killed it for me.

2/5
4/10

More time and effort in to the work.
better jokes/writing
practice, a lot.
good luck on your next one

timoku responds:

yeah sorry my voice does suck

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Uploaded
Jun 1, 2009
11:40 PM EDT