Entertaining, needs abit more though

~~REVIEW~~
Ok so this was a cute like {COMIC} style of a toon, i like the comic style and even that of its black and white style, a few things i did notice however, are, first that the music is ok but you can hear some {STATIC} in the backround, now you may want to fix that and have a sharper more clear sounding music to it, and second i wouldnt mind seeing abit of {COLOR} in the black and white, not alot just maybe some eyes here and there or maybe another idea would be that the outer {FRAME} is in color while still keeping the {COMIC} in black and white, and now the last thing but not the least, but you have the flash {LOOPING} i would suggest adding a stop action code, so it doesnt loop also some play and replay buttons at the start and end would also be nice, these are just a few ideas that could improve onto this cute little comic style flash, but anyways i had fun watching this and even got a good laugh or two from it so keep up the good flash animations.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
I had mentioned a few things that i thought could improve on this so first off i though abit of color could be added, my only other issue with this one would be that it would "LOOP" over and over and you could fix that easily with an action script code >> Stop-Action-Code. checkout tutorials on the newground forums if you are unsure how to do a Stop-Action-Code. oh and one more thing i found was that you can hear some {STATIC} in the music so the quality was abit low, well hope you get something from the review.

~~OVERALL~~
entertaining comic style, needs abit of cleaning up though.

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Hey

If you drew this on your own, then it's pretty good and I like it. If you stole the pics though... then go off and die somewhere or something. but I'm gonna assume you didn't so ... good job ^_^

Not too good.

Doesn't look like you wanted to make it that good on purpose, but meh. I have my three review quota to fill and your submission was on the way.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

No animation to speak of. I can live with that if you can make it work, but it didn't seem you got it working for you with just the simple pictures. It also seemed like you didn't do the pictures yourself as they looked like things you found off of the internet.

To make something like this work I would recommend making your own pictures, adding simple animations or at least transitions between pictures to allow it to run smoothly, and adding color to the pictures so they are easier on the eyes.

~ Story/Content ~

The story was so boring that I don't even remember what it was all about now. Doesn't seem fitting for the newgrounds audience and doesn't seem like it would be interesting to too many people at all.

I think it needs to be a bit longer and you could add a next/back button so people could read/view at their own pace since some people read faster/slower than other people.

~ Audio ~

The audio was terrible. Very staticy and hard on the ears. Not only does it need to be turned down a bit, but you need to find some music without the static.

~ Overall ~

Seems like it was just a spam submission, but either way it needs a lot of improvement to be anything worth a view in my opinion.

hah.

What the fuck is this shit?

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this isnt mature and the sound quality is TERRIBLE! seriously this is bad