A Bid For Freedom

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While you load, feel free to read these comments, and also check out the collaborators' sites down below for more great work.
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Here is the Newgrounds Flash version of "A Bid for Freedom".

It is a story that I wrote and converted into a small fable with images provided by the talented Nacho Rodriguez (who created Mr. Coo and won the #1 slot in Cold Hard Flash's Best Animated) and lush watercolours by his girlfriend Cecilia Deshayes.
It is an illustrated storybook, narrated for your pleasure by the debonair Andy Dennis, with guest turns by Sasuya and Josh "Tomamoto" Tomar you HAVE to hear!
The Storybook route was pursued so it could enter ReNaeNae's excellent Storybook Collab;
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1003968 Talents in writing, art, voice, sound, code etc. should give it a look!

To turn the pages, hover your mouse pointer over the bottom corner of the page, then left-click and drag the page across with your mouse until it fully flips over.
Narration starts on each page as you view it, but you're free to read at your own pace (you can right-click and select "Zoom In", then drag around to see all the fine details).

This story is NOT an attempt at hair-pin-bend trigger-happy balls-to-the-wall FBF hentai-maniac game-parodying shenanigannary. NO REALLY, IT'S NOT!
The power here is in the words and the pictures.
There is COMEDY, ACTION, DRAMA and ROMANCE, all skewed at odd angles.
There's fantasy, exotic locations, body odour, and even a fast car if you stick with it!
Have patience, we've many things to offer you. Stick with us. We're a good group.

Please vote and review showing respect to the combined talent and hard work involved in this Flash. A lot of passion went into this just for you guys, so be fair.
Critique, constructive criticism, suggestions, these are things we graciously accept.
If you vote or review abusively, you let Newgrounds down. Don't.
If this is "not your sort of thing" or you're somehow disappointed by the lack of animation, this is not the fault of anyone involved; no-one's forcing you to watch!

With all this in mind, we hope you enjoy (with your drink or snack of choice) our hard work, vote and review responsibly... and may your day be brighter.

For more awesome while you wait, check out:
www.mistercoo.com (Nacho's site)
http://ceciliadeshayes.blogspot. com (Cecilia's blog)
www.ediblecastle.com (home to Andy Dennis and his mate Will)
www.scarymarymedia.com (earlier collaborative efforts between me, a mate of mine and Nacho, including an award-winning short for the Marbella Film Festival)


This section is for the creative people out there:

This has been a hot coal in my hands for quite some time, burning with collective passion, yet I've been reluctant to throw it into the fire.
Enough people are happy with the results as they stand for me to go forth and submit it.
Trust that this will blossom over time as we come back to better adorn this work.

My preliminary thanks are on this page:

I additionally thank DrNeroCF for saving us in the coding department and Deathcon for further help; Joey Young (http://joeymofo.newgrounds.com) for providing sound effects at short notice and the Very Odd House (http://www.theveryoddhou se.com/) for a small snippet of lush score; and to Josh Tomar, introduced late into the project yet he delivered an outstanding performance within minutes of me asking him.
Further thanks go to the Newgrounds Team for their support of this work, and to all Newgrounds users who do the same (including Mr GUS, who is highly underrated: be sure to see his latest http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/483436 and vote for it in this year's Treasure Hunt).
Any other great participants that come to light will be remembered here equally.



Heres the thing.

The reason I loved this so much was not only becsue it was a funny and heartwarming story (despite the end). But it was tottally unique.
A story? in flash? Awesome!
Kudos to the narrator whos voice was as clear as a crystal and I could hear every word, and understand them perfectly.
A well deserved 10

P.S. Fantastic little tale.

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one of a million

this is one in a million. .this is a nugget of pure gold. the writing was excellent, the voice acting was very good... I would love to hear which voices where tomamotos though. i could barely recognise any of the voices! your writing skills... well... let me put it like this. I HATE ENGLISH and failed at school because i despised stories and poetry. But for some reason i love it for the first time. well done. pure gold man. you SO have a career ahead of you. KEEP IT UP!

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Excellent, as I expected

I was a bit surprised to see this submission so soon, I didn't know it was already so advanced when I read it.
I don't need to tell you I loved the story, I think that is clear by now, so I might as well comment on the other elements. At first I felt the narration a bit awkward (it was great, I just had a different idea when I read it), but he is obviously talented and with every page I liked it a bit more, in such way that at the end I was very comfortable with it. Maybe it was because the tone was a bit different from the cartoony looks of the character, but the final result was great, adding to the contrasts in the story. Also al other sound effects and voices were very well done and fitted the atomsphere perfectly.
Nacho's illustrations are obviously great, for the most of it, they surpassed my expectations of what the illustration for the next page would be.. and in some peculiar cases, it was EXACTLY how I had imagined it. I want to thank you also for recommending me to watch MR.Coo, I loved it, even fav'ed it.

Finally ,you can imagine my surprise when I read your comments and saw my username there. It was a very pleasent surprise, thank you for that. It is very important to me that someone who can write like this liked my story.

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Nice Job

this is so wonderful. I enjoyed it a lot. the illustrations are well done, and the colors, and style fit well and are good. The monologue... aww, I loved it! When I heard the voice of the narrator, and the way that he speaks, the first thing that popped in my head was the Legacy of Kain series, it's a video game, which has a brilliant story script by the way, It's just like it. the narrators voice is a mix of Kain and Raziel, with the way he speaks and choices of words, but like I said before Nice job! I loved it!

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An adult short story with children's book appeal

I like the drawings and I loved the page appeal. The coloring was so well planned and worked so well with the story. I love the modern elements of internet jargon throughout the piece. It just helped to mark this piece as a modern element of internet culture rather than just a great element of storytelling.

I will say that it is not simple to figure the gui out. I opened and re-opened multiple times. Try to fix this style to be more logical for any user to manipulate without much reading of the instructions.

It is an excellent piece full of really beautiful mastery of storytelling and flash innovative techniques.

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4.42 / 5.00

Apr 20, 2009
10:28 PM EDT
Comedy - Original