I could go into how generic this is.
How played out the entire concept is.
Or even how it's basically THE stereotypical Newgrounds flash.
I could even talk about how it's shit like this that keeps Newgrounds from becoming more than what it currently is and has been for a few years now.
But I'm not going to.
Instead I'm going to ask, why the fuck is there a writer signed on to this?
Was that writing? Is this a story? Was that dialogue?
Hur, now that's not even funny.
Writing is a fucking art form, it's not just some tool for other mediums to abuse.
I don't care if you want to keep making flashes like this, go the fuck ahead. Have fun being mediocre and chained down by someone else's ideals of entertainment and quality.
But don't degrade a respectable craft by calling this "Writing."