Um...

Is there a point to this? Do you self a favor and try harder next time. It cant be any fun being told how much your work sucks. Make a few pratice flicks and improve your skill and then revamp this and resubmit an awesome version.

Needs polishing.

Although the idea could be interesting, the details need to be polished before it should be published anywhere. For instance, the intro to the video is longer than the movie itself. I'd recommend that you add more details and make a more lengthy video, as the speed makes it really difficult to grasp anything of significance or interest from the video.

In addition, it would have been more entertaining if there were lines of dialogue. I'd recommend that you add that, as dialogue adds meaning and comedy to videos. If this was supposed to be a parody, then it is best to have dialogue that makes this clear in the actual video.

Finally, it would help if you made the visuals a little more clear. For instance, there's little details like the clock in the opening, and there's major details like the battle with the green stick figure. It's one thing to have perfect visuals, it's another to know what in the world is going on.

Okay so...

My suggestion. The intro was longer than the actual Flash. I know it's hard, but wait until you have a long enough and detailed enough project to post it. Have you considered sprites? They work better in terms of time in/length for advancing ideas.

No actual storyline, a single line of dialog... it was sketchy. Don't get your feelings hurt if it's not up tomorrow.