paradise missing draft

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This is the prologue of my series and senior thesis: Paradise Missing (it's also my first serious venture into flash). The full episode should be between 20-30 minutes long, and this is what I have so far, so I guess I have a ways to go. I also may replace this one with an updated version if I have time. I hope you enjoy it and I would love any comments or criticism you guys have to offer. The rest of the project is supposed to be finished by April 15th.
The song at the end is "Another Brick in Hadrian's Wall" by Hans Zimmer.

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Great story period

I was shocked that the story was this good! Keep up the good work. You will get better with the animation as time goes by. I know that you know how to tell a story though. Great timing! THE PUPPY ROOM!!!

Much potential

This is a very solid cartoon, not gonna lie. Keep at it for when it comes out it will be very sweet. But things you need to work on

- Fix up the drawings and make them look more detailed and better.
- Animation ( Lip Sync and Frame By Frame - spend more time on those, read up on it. )

Good luck, this has so much potential I would love to see it at its best!



illustrations 2 / 10

Animation 4 / 10

Humour 3 / 10

Sorry, this just doesn't do it for me.

brilliant idea

great idea for a series,
work on your flash skills and it could be top rating stuff
ill support you 100 percent
use a little more detail on the scenery
and work on a little louder audio
besides that props


I am eager to see the next one... It is quite remarkable that this flash is very entertaining, though the animation and drawings could be a lot better (okay, I know- it's a real pain in the ass to make a movie of that length with fluid and varied animations.)

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4.36 / 5.00

Feb 16, 2009
12:48 AM EST
Comedy - Original