something is amiss. the animation is relatively dull , and i can't say that the voice acting or plot really makes up for it. you could nix the animation all together and still know what's going on. this isn't good.
i think it would be nice if dave was more. . . what's the word?. . . animated. i don't really care about the customer, but i want to see dave get upset. slam his head against the counter, slap himself in the face, stab himself to get out of work. anything. make his distress visually entertaining, because watching him sit there and think is pretty boring.
plot wise. . . i knew he was going to fuck up that guy's food. try throwing in a kitten. it's adorable as well as inconvenient. something less predictable.