You have ALOT of work to do!
~ The animation was poor
~ The choice of song was just terrible
~ The timing was not very good E.G. It shouldn't take that long to hit someone
~ There was no obvious plot line
~ No voice acting or relevant sounds
~ Improve on your animation skills, learn about timing and what not
~ Once you have made the animation then look for a suitable song.
~ Expand/develop on the plot line. It took me a few playbacks to actually realise what was going on
~ Add sufficient voice acting, and sounds. Or even INCLUDE come voice acting
~ I saw what you were trying to do, and I see that you did put some effort into this.
~ Unfortunately though, I didn't think it was that good.
~ I thought this animation was quite poor, however I have included enough criticism to say why it was poor. I think your idea was good, however it could have used a lot more effort to get what you wanted.
~ With some more practice, you could work on this and make it better, hence why I gave you the 2 stars....I think if you put your mind to it...You can be capable of making this much better.
~[Review Request Club]~