Waz that supposed2be an intro?!

That waz short,It had no plotNO story line just sum`n that changes when
U click it.Put da effort 2 finish it,Thank U.

Its good

For the most part is pretty good, but I can't help but wish there was a bit of music in the background and some sound effects for the pencil markings.

Looks Good, Opressively Silent

This was a very good looking video. Really short, but bespeaks of good things. The lack of sound was almost painful, however. I'm looking forward to more.

Pacing problems

It was fine, for what little there was and I won't complain about the length of an 'intro'.

The text is a problem. It stays on screen too long and doesn't make much of an impact. Also, if this is an introduction, I'm not sure it's doing its job properly. Is calling the pencil a sacred object supposed to be humorous? What it boils down to is: The intro doesn't give you a feel for what's to come, which is what it's supposed to be doing.

Yawn

You spelled business incorrectly.