WHAT were you THINKING?!
Not to be TOO harsh...
But Quantity NEVER beats Quality in this occasion.
I mean, the idea wasn't THAT original, and it wasn't that great, yet I still wondered.
What could've been? Next time, make a better storyplan, spend more time on character creation, and try to be more lively when speaking. This fast-stop comedy, needs some working on. It doesn't work every time =D *Cough*MGSAWESOME*Cough*
You can do it though ^^;;, with some diligence, and the effort needed =D
You're one foot over the obstacle, another one to go, and you'll get there so to speak! ^^;;