meh

gave me a few lols so 7/10

Work on the animation and add some originality.

It's a typical, generic story. You haven't really shown us anything new - next time, maybe think of a twist or something that will take this a step up.

The scene with the eye turning green is classic horror film. Nice.

I think that the scene with the alien bursting out didn't quite have enough impact - maybe a bit more acting in the voice (if he's so scared, shouldn't he be shouting or showing emotion?) or maybe have the music kick in a few seconds earlier than it did.

The sudden stop of the music was slightly jarring though.

You do need to work on your drawings - the human proportions are constantly changing, with massive legs, messed up limbs or torsos...

I did like some of your colours though.

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room for improvement

Visuals: the frames were roughly drawn but that will remedy itself with time, it was very well animated, the scenes switched too quickly and it felt kind of rushed, try to give the viewer time to adjust to the new surroundings when a scene change occurs

Audio: the voice acting was decent, there is room for improvement though, I liked the music, but it cut out too quickly as the scenes changed

Overall: a pretty good little flash, the plot is good once you understand what's going on, just keep practicing, you have a lot of potential, can't wait to see where you take us next

.:Review Request Club:.

A decent start

I think that with practice, your animating style can come on. Did you use your mouse or a graphics tablet to make this? I will assume that you used a mouse, due to the way it looks. If so, invest in a tablet and the drawing will improve almost instantly. Try zooming in a little more and using a smaller tool to draw with - this will improve the detail.

The plot isn't too bad, but I think that it needs to be fleshed out a little more, just give some more detail into the scouting mission, what the base is doing on that rock, are they scouts, a mining colony, or something else?

Finally, the sound effects could be improved slightly - try to get the sound effects down to the same level as the voices, so when you activate some of the sounds, they do sound a little on the loud side.

A good start, I look forward to part 2.

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Well, the graphics look a bit rough, but I think with some more practice you can easily improve on that.

The voice acting was good, only downside is the low sound quality.

The story is a bit hard to follow because of the quick scene changes. It seems very hard to improve on the scene changes, but maybe you can give the viewer a bit time.
I'll try to explain what I mean by saying that: Right now, you change scenes and instantly continue with the story (ie you cut to what seems to be some kind of control room and instantly some character is saying something). Maybe it would work better if you wait a short time before someone speaks after the cut. That way the viewer had some time to notice that the camera now shows a completly different room with different characters in it.

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