much better!
You have officialy redeemed yourself for the emo vid last time. now u just need to add some action sequences and it will be good. ^_^
Author Comments
Woo-hoo! My second flash! Hope you guys enjoy this. I worked really hard on it! This is about a guy who wants a cheeseburger but... well, you'll find out. This time, I added dialogue, and yes, all the people speaking are me. I even tried lip-syncing! It turned out better than I expected. Try to spot the hidden characters I put in!
This was vaguely based off of iJustine's "I Want a Cheeseburger" YouTube video where she talks about her experience with an annoying waiter like the one you're about to see.
The music in the background is Hacsev Jazz. Be sure to check him out, he's got great audio files!
http://hacsev.newgrounds.
com/
So, I guess that's it! Hope you guys like it! I'm still trying to think of an idea for my third flash, so if you got any ideas you wanna share, feel free to PM me or something ;D
[You might wanna turn up the volume on your computer, the sound is a bit low.]
ThatAzianKid responds:
Dang david stop talking like a nerd. "Redeemed?" Come on. Anime/Sci Fi club is gettin' to you, QUIT BEFORE IT COMPLETELY TAKES YOU OVER!
Cheesy
It was alright but yeah the people were cut out of the screen
ThatAzianKid responds:
Yeah, I noticed that too but it was too late to fix it, or else I'd have to go thru all the scenes and move the background and characters and it was just painful thinking about it... But I didn't notice while I was making it cuz the background was covering up the edges of the actual flash, guess I shoulda just set it so it only showed the outline of the background.
Anyways, thanks for the review =]
Good, but needs improvement
I liked it, but the characters head were cut out of the screen. Kind of annoying. good job with the audio.
Good start but still lacking
The art is great, you might want to use a higher fps to make the animation alot smoother and maybe make the voices a little bit easier to hear. Other than that, i liked it!
ThatAzianKid responds:
I guess 8 fps is kinda slow... I didn't realize a faster speed would make it smoother, thanks for the advice!
And thanks for the review too =]
Bit slow
It's hard to tell what the characters are saying. I think increasing the pace of the action and dialogue would help too. That doesn't mean talk faster. I mean increase the pace of the delivery.
