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Death prone Thomas

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NOT A WALK LOOP


Heres a movie I was doing about one of my friends in our flash group.
He had this idea how every episode he could die (much like south park)
Well I started with the first clip in the movie as the demo and soon added onto it.
Pretty soon I added music. It's not finished and I'm looking for feedback on how to improve.
Its my first time working with so many layers and tweens.


Anyway this isn't just meant to be pointless deaths because "deaths is arez coolz"


Its mainly made for a a friend of mine


And all the characters in this flash are liveing breathing people from our town.


1st appearances: Wyatt (wyatfilms) burritos (burrito15) and the star thomas (xXFaYdXx)
2nd appearance: JR as himself


Animation/concept/idea: Wyatfilms

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A good start

I agree with MattHarty's review. It needs a start button, replay button and sound effects.

[opinion]
Also, it would be improved if the deaths were a little more explicit. Actually show him get run over by the car in the first clip. In the last one, show him hitting the car, breaking the windshield and splatting on something.

Another idea is to change the viewpoint during a clip. For the last clip, the car crash, switch the view just before the crash to show his car and the other car that hits his. This could also work for the first clip. Maybe switch to a view from the other driver's perspective just before he gets run over.
[/opinion]

I think you could make this into a good flash, just keep working on it.

Hmmm...

Could use some work buddy..

Keep up the good work...You barely escaped my BLAM

UnEducatedProduction responds:

Your review dose not suggest ways for me to improve at all. Useless review.

It's alright

Needs a preoloader, needs a start button, needs a replay button at the end. The music suits the type of movie well, but it'd be better if you added sound effects throughout the movie. Not much I can say about the concept, it's a ripoff of Kenny from southpark but it's still funny. All I can say is maybe add more deaths and the other things I mentioned.

Well I'm not going to give this a zero...

...but I'm not going to give it a two either. It was sub par, the character design wasn't anything too new, and without a full episode I can't really relate ehis to anything. Well, good luck in the future, just make better characters and situations.

Some points for improvement...

Make sure you finish it first before uploading it on NG. Nobody likes an unfinished flash.

" It's not finished and I'm looking..." -you.

Anyway, if it gets Blammed, finish it and improve it.

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Votes
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Score
2.30 / 5.00

Uploaded
Sep 27, 2008
1:22 AM EDT