This was a great first flash, a good one to get started on. The sound clips were great and the animation/art was pretty good, but could improve(make the light effects more realistic and make the art neater).
In some parts it was boring because it switched back to the man looking at his computer. Add some more plot! Some suggestions would be to make the girl a stalker, and stalk the man until he gives her a comment..
OMG stalking. That's an incredible idea, seriously. But, having in mind that she killed "me"... :D Who knows? Anyways, very interesting idea. Thanks. :D
for your first flash thats pretty good.maybe next time add more randomness and touch up on your drawing skills but other then that nice work :)
That was pretty good, a little work and some time fixing animation and you'll be on your way to making front page, good storyline and pretty funny ^_^
At first I didn't see that the stuff on the character was light. (it looked like semen).
other than that it was pretty good.
Look forward to more submissions from you.
... That was random lol