Very simple...

To be plainly blunt, This video needs length, like at least 1 minute more...
You gonna keep hearing it over and over again...its gonna get tirering after the umpteenth time.
The humor (the single joke) was simple, nothing to intresting, but nothing to boreing, just a plain joke.
I know its can get tiersome to work on a video for hours, or days, or even weeks. But I can garentee, if you put the time in it, People will watch it. Also, if you can't get any ideas, just ask for help. Most people will help you if you ask, I know I would.

Shit

1. It's not funny
2. It makes no sense
3. Too short

This was really bad, make something better.

Length!

For 20 min, that's not a bad video. Although the humor was stale, it was mildly entertaining. (Lower end of mild have you)

I would work on your plot a bit more for your next one, and some more... well funny humor would be nice.

Length, length, length! I feel like a broken record in my reviews. Make them longer! I know it's hard to sit at your computer for hours on end making these flash videos, but it's worth it! You'll never be successful in flash if you don't add some length!

3 of 10.

Forever changing,
Secretnile

P.S. Rated 4 of 10, just because you had sound, another thing I have to say 50 times a day.

LOL!!

halarious...lol HOW MANY?IS A FEW....
JUST A 1MILLION FEW LOL =D