No animation, silly voice acting, no plot advance

Again, another episode with minimal animation, bad gollum-ish voice over-acting and no plot advancement.

I was pleased that you didn't have a stupidly lengthened intro this time. Good call if you want the series to be taken seriously.

The animation was non-existent - a couple of near-identical frames and that's it. Even if you wanted to hid the guy's face, you could have moved the camera around, drawn his back from different angles, maybe even drawn his profile in silhouette or drawn a mouth, with the rest of his face in shadow.

The 2 characters sound identical and both sound just like the narrator. Use different voices for different characters - not just a silly gollum-type voice for each. Aren't these guys meant to be human?

Given the fact that you didn't even bother to re-take the audio after your mistakes and the minimal amount of graphical work, I'm wondering if this is spam - some sort of joke.

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Still getting better...

Ok, this time there wasn't any animation in here. The person in front of the screen could have at least moved his head or arms once in a while.

Your voice acting sure is getting better. It doesn't sound as much "unintentionally comical" like in the last episode.
But it was very hard to follow the conversation as it was really hard to tell when one person stopped speaking and when the other person started speaking.

Subtitles may help with this. You could then add the name in front of a new line and the viewer will know instantly who is saying what.
Or you could work with different camera angles. Use the camera angle from behind the chair when the person sitting in the chair is speaking and use a different one (maybe from the side, so you don't have to show the faces of the characters yet) when the one on the screen is speaking.

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Neds Animation

Why doesn't this piece have any animation? Okay, so maybe I'm being a little harsh on that token, as you've added the flickering of the screen, but there is nothing else, save from the intro, which I skipped, as I'm sure I've heard it all before.

Let's get the usuals out of the way first:

1) It needs to be longer - how else can we properly guage your skills as a writer / animator?

2)Consider adding more depth to the plot, which would make more scenes, but it would add a new dimension to the piece.

I'd also start hopping between camera angles, giving you a better presentation of the art - watch some movies with conversations in - the director uses a multitude of camera angles to get the shot he wants, so he can show it from all around the place. If you don't want to show the main bad guy's face, then it's fair enough. Give us a shot of his lackey by all means, so that we don't get bored during the show.

Also this is a step backwards on the lip-sync, as you don't seem to be interested in trying to improve it.

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Getting better...

You are sllowly but surely getting better...

Your voice acting is a little more clear and you seem be expressing more emotion, but, you cant really tell when one preson stop talking and another starts....
The graphics and animation in this on were pretty basic but you done well...

RRC
xIDoL

Alright.

I know you have a new one out, which is better then these, but I still have to review them like I'm trying to help you improve.

Animation/Graphics - The animation itself hasn't changed any. If anything there wasn't any animation at all in this one. It was just a picture with voices overdubbed and not to be mean, almost anyone could do that whether they had flash talent or not. I do have to admit that your drawing has gotten better since you have been animating this series though. Congrats on that.

Story - The same old same old again. This really needs more action and just plain more stuff. It's just two people sitting there sharing words. There just needs to be more then that and I hope number 10 is like that because it did win Daily 1st.

Audio - The voices, while weird, they are almost fitting and they are clear. I do understand everything that is being said. Everything else about the audio also seems to be fine.

Overall, I'm still waiting till I watch that one episode that really stands out. I hope I run into it soon.

C52

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