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frisbee short

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this is a short about a frisbee :D


ok well this is a short i made in like 2-3 hours and it was goin to be just practice but then i decided to submit it to see what u guys think


animated by thebeanhead
voice by spamup99


vote fairly please

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Haha well done!

Heh you finished that quick! Looks pretty good! Arms seemed to work properly.

You could maybe add a little but it could show a little backstory behind the bottles appearance, although I guess that could ruin the randomisity of the clip.
I was thinking something pretty random like it been fired from a missle silo. :P

thebeanhead responds:

thanks :D

Lol ok

~~REVIEW~~
Lol well abit on the shortside but it was entertaining and did make me laugh abit i liked it though, keep up the good work

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Abit longer nexttime

~~OVERALL~~
Fuuny and short

~X~

thebeanhead responds:

~~RESPONCE~~
thanks ! and i will keep that tip in mind thanks :D

Good concept, good joke, way flimsy followthrough

good! even as a short, though, it lacked some easy tricks to make it better: maybe have a panting running sound and show the dude jumping under the frisbee. not entirely, at first, give the viewer something to be surprised at, like make them think it's a dog by just showing hair, and then some forehead, then the sound becomes recognizable, then -bam- he tackles it. And then some further quick animation showing him get sick or "this tastes gross" to segue Dettol in. And, seeing him act funny in the background would get kicks. I'd watch it!

thebeanhead responds:

thanks for the tips and the fair vote :D Thanks !

Nice Animating

The animations looked nice, and the idea was kind of funny. It was short and sweet, almost like a commercial.

But the voice seemed out of place.

thebeanhead responds:

thanks :D

and i am sure i will get the timing right in future animations :D

Mang

IN the US, almost no one hears about Dettol, I Love that stuff. It burns off eczema, diluted can kill off a major surface infection, it cleans like heck, and it smells so damn sterile.

thebeanhead responds:

thanks but i think your a little obsessed lol only joking :D

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Uploaded
Jul 8, 2008
6:02 PM EDT