Hmmm...
You've got potential, but you need better animation. I may be a noob, but there's one thing I know and that's I KNOW YOU CAN DO BETTER! You got a pretty good storyline, and the drawing is pretty good, but in honour of Newgrounds, I'm only giving you 5 of 10 stars. It was entertaining, but could use some improvement. In other words, YOU RULE, but need to spend a little more time on your flash movies :)