You could have added speach...

The graphics could have been better, it doesn´t require Action Scripting. The plot where just above positive response. And animations could improve. But if this is your first flash, it´s kinda good. But don´t submit content that doesn´t have been in production for at least a week, and don´t before your skill increases. But it will all come to you eventually. Keep it up and you will make a flash hit somtime!