Much to improve

First of all was the preloader. Having the pico day one set to 12 fps just makes it DRAG ON.
Also, were there voices? I THOUGHT I could hear voices behind the speech bubbles but it was very monotone and very quiet.
And one quick tip, change the sound setting from 'event' to 'stream' it should stop it from replaying over its self upon hitting replay.

Good luck in the future