Not bad for your first but....

You really needed to use a better microphone... / face palm

A few small suggestions...

Aside from the crudely done outlined characters, this was a bit off, firstly you had your disclaimer centered around a song which lasted 3+ minutes. although it was an attempt at a joke it carried with it the rest of the piece long boring childish attempts at humor. If there is one area you could possibly improve upon it is the voices. The voices went in and out, and sometimes could not be understood at all during speaches. But, you just began flash, so i've no doubt that you will be able to improve. But this piece is lost to the winds.

well then

it was ok storyline. the sound and picture quality werent anything special. im sorry i just dont think its newgrounds worthy.

gee

i think ur classmates should all look at the frontpage material then die