What's there is good, just not much there.
Needs sound badly! It's neat, but needs more.
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a random doodle of the abstract thoughts that came to my mind... you really can't imagine the way the thoughts float in your mind..
paragsid responds:
Thanx a lot... i know it's raw and all. i did this to test my new tablet. my friends saw it and said i should upload it. I hadn't tweaked it or anything. I am really blown by the response cos, this i too admit is very very raw. But now i'm inspired. Thanx guys. I need all the suggestions and hints.
well
heres my thoughts, one it needs sound, two more pictures and abstractness thrown in instead of the nonstopping loop of the same 4-5 pictures, three i definately agree that this shows quite a bit of the mind thoughts. So overall good flash, i definately think though you got the potential to do better.
paragsid responds:
Thanx... As i said, this was just a trial. you are really sweet. that was a huge compliment.
Keep it up
This is pretty nicely put together, though very short.
Add color and music to emphasize on certain aspects of the piece.
I have to disagree with lazyguy69 when he said you needed a plot, you had a plot, it was the stream of consciousness.
I have to say I envy you for your skill in fbf. Good work, keep it up and dont let negative reviews get you down. Learn from them and keep going. =]
paragsid responds:
Thanx dude... it was a real booster.. thanx for sticking to me.. you are really sweet... this was just a try... there's nothing to envy in me, i'm just a beginner.
its OK
The art was ok, but I WANT SOUND!!!!!!! The trippy picture and some 60s psychodelic music would kick ass!
paragsid responds:
thanx.. the thought of uploading this work was just out of the blue.. actually didnt get time to tweak it..
Not too bad
I enjoyed this because it is exactly what you said. It's like a stream of consciousness, one idea flowing directly into the next. You have some talent for the frame by frame style, and I really liked how one image transitioned into the next. If it was longer and had some fitting music, it would really be a sight to see. Don't let bad reviews get you down. Continue to improve your craft.
paragsid responds:
Thanx dude, i'll really try to make it it longer with music and all for my next attempt.. thanx for the support.
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- Mar 21, 2008
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