Bravo for your first Flash!!!

I'll just state this to clear it up. I have read the story that this Flash is based off of and I know for a fact it has nothing to do with the other "Paladin" series. It's based off of the Yugioh creatures. No it's not some stupid card thing we're gonna see again. It's the actual creatures living out their own lives, which sounds pretty cool when you think about it.

The voice was a little loud, but I'm not gonna discredit you for that because this technically is your first Flash submission that really means something. You were just precautious is all. The voice could go a little deeper, but from looking at The Paladin Of White Dragon card it actually fits quite a bit. In the picture, the creature looks rather young and might have a little bit higher of a tone.

I liked the music choice at the end. Simple, yet very effective. In all honesty, I got goosebumps. NOT KIDDING!!!

Bottom line, you deserve a good score. It needs work, so I'll skip on the 10...sorry! Of course, I happen to know the work you poured in to the book version itself. Not to mention, trying to fit it all together as a Flash too. Hard work pays off and for a first Flash, I don't think you can expect that much better than this. Good artwork too! Adios! *poof*

Hmm...

Bold move, naming it "Paladin's Quest". The Paladin series is already well established here on Newgrounds, and there might be a few people who would take exeption to this. Just make sure it doesn't follow Paladin's storyline, or I and the rest of NG will own you with our collective Blamhammer.

Other than that, the animation looks sorta nice, but then again, I just finished watching some of the biggest S*** that was still in review, so this looks great compared to them.

If you REALLY want to score major points, I suggest that you use music from the NGAP. Or make your own, whichever works.

Good luck!
-[CE]

er...

that was high quality?

Good

I agree with some of the others below you kind of need to work on the voice parts a bit but other than that it looks interesting. Can't wait to see the actual flash.

not that you should change it but..

the title may cause some people to accuse you of ripping off a certain established, respected series already on ng. i hope the style and plot will make this distinct.

also, the voice acting could use some tweakage, but others have made that clear. so hurry up with that first episode!