well...

you have a good start but you need to work on your poetry other than that.....stop faking goth and you'll be OK

its good but......

you said you shot youself in the head right on the poem i heard 2 shots it takes one shot to the head to die it was pretty good

It was just text and sounds.

All this was was just text with some sound effects, the sound effects didn't even go with the movie at all, excluding the gunshot at the end. If you were going to make this movie you should have ahd some visuals, like you should have had a movie sequence playing as the poem's text was appearing at the bottom, it could have made a good movie, but what you had was just completely pointless as it was just nothing other than text and some sound effects.

Peace Out, Afro Stud

0/5

how sad

still.....a poem on NG....

That was horrible

If that was a suidice note, i would laugh so hard at their dead corpse at their funeral.
but yeah
booo, you suck!