Whilst on its own, its an improvment, still needs a tad more work. Some better SFX and more detail on the animation would swing it for me..
Good effort though. Keep at it, I see better just over the next hill...
Thanks, I'm always trying to improve.
It didn't sparkle
Two things you need to work on: Plot/Story Devolopment, and sound ( clear voices & and consistancy in background music). Some of the voices where kinda muffled and bg music changed part way threw a scene.
Some things you did well. Drawing and visual queues. While they aren't the best drawings, you were able to animate them well, which can make a scribble look amazing. Secondly everything was clear visually, and the speech bar helped.
Tip: If you have alot of the same mc (i.e. the hair guys face), it goes a long way to making it look more random/natural if you make 3-4 different ones, even if its small variation and scatter them. Also, if you want a 6min cartoon break it up into two movies next time, many people don't want to sit around for a long time for a flash animation especially if the plot isn't developing fast enough
Best of luck with future episodes.
Thanks for the tips!
ok, the stroy went no where, the animation was so-so, and the sound effects were kinda lame. .. all in all. meh.. i see some potential but you gotta work hard
Thanks for being honest. However, we worked very hard on this. Just be glad we improved on the voices a little :)