This video is my first real, difficult work in Flash, so pardon the mess....
This video is based off of the in-the-works novel "He Who Bleeds Lightning", which is being written collaboratively by myself and Jeffrey Wittenberg, and can be found at http://talesofthedarkness .blogspot.com . This video version is highly, highly modified from the original, due to time restraints, deadlines, and my lack of The great ability I would have needed to create it properly. I hope to someday redo this video and make it true to the original story.
Thanks for watching!
Pretty stereotypic anime
OKAY, all things considered. Has potential.
But I couldn't figure out what was happening, to save my life! Before thinking about the title, it looked like he was kind of peeing or something. Some advice: If it's of plot signifigance, the viewer must be sure. The "elevator music" sign was kind of redundant. Of course it was, he just entered an elevator! Untill you learn to voice act, or learn to draw better representations, subtitles would be nice.
For a 1'st dedicated try, not bad
Story was ok in my opinion, the whole dream sequence thing is a bit overplayed though. Also, kudos on the SFX, most ppl. don't have 'em, but you did, very nice. Plus the music choice is grand as well. 2 main probs. though, are no voice acting and choppy animation, but like you said you plan on doing a remake any ways, so no foul I guess.
swtory seems great.
i liked how it was that he was in some sort of prison,making it all dramatic. but at the same time, it was funny. i would like to see the story, and i bet it will be a good one
guess i should leave a rewiev
(its been like half a year since my last one, so I might be a little rusty)
alright then, lets start with the graphics and stuff, what could have been improved are: in the beginning, and later in it, the wrist, thumb and elbow is seperated with a line, but one of the arms doesn´t have that line by the elbow, also the lines are not always straight, and the "missing line" I talked about has a small edge sticking out(but it might make it look better, I havent seen it without the lines so I cant possibly know), and the lightning is just terrible, looks like something out of arfenhouse -.- . oh yeah, just noticed that the reflections from the light reflects on different sides of the eyes, and that the bars on the windows are missing on his second attempt to escape.
there was no problem with the sound and music you chose(apart from the "screech" that was a bit to long if you ask me), but you could have added a few sound effects, like some kind of electrical effect when he bleeds
overall, I thought it was quite good, even though it had a lot of flaws, end score 7/10 and a vote of four, I will try to see the final remake, but I will probably forget it in like 3 days :\
Blam
That doesn't mean it doesn't have potential however. I just don't believe that should really just tandomly make it. I'll be looking foreward to the final production.