I tell ya..

He should have taken the shoes. Couple things you should consider:
- The shoes in the beginning didn't make sense.
- The intro was too long with the text going all over the place (viewer loses interest before you show your first character)
- Story should be resolved by him getting something, even if they're a downgrade from what he's wearing.

The Shoe Master

I like the music.
Very moving.
Made me wanna get new shoes.

Anyway,
dude, would you mind if
I took your characters
and made another flash movie?
I'll give you credit, of course.

Let me know... fast.
My trial version of Flash MX is expiring in like, 2 weeks.

Rock on

OK...

Good effort, I guess.

It helps if you have some kind of ... motive or goal for your piece before you try and submit it.