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Thanks for the second frontpage Tom!
The second installment of the series "Conditions".
PLEASE WATCH EPISODE 1 BEFORE WATCHING THIS.
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A criminal took Red (Member of the Police Department using "The device") his wife as a hostage.
In exchange for his wife, he wants Red's device.
But Red can't release the device because of the conditions (His adrenaline level is too high).
Stay tuned for further episodes!
Great flash! It's really funny how these essay-writers are grumbling about lack of depth, plot what so ever like they would be reviewing a hollywood movie. This is a great sci-fi flash movie with developing story - of course if there will be more episodes. I like the idea about crazy scientist, super-glove and the 3 conditions - like from Asimov's robot stories. Keep up the good work!
There should be more depth.
I wasn't sure that you could pull it off at the beginning because of how weak the plot felt, and my suspicions seem to be right. The only thing you need is more depth. Since this is only the second in the series, barely anywhere in the plot and it says to be concluded in the next episode, it leads me to the conclusion that this series is lacking in story depth (so far that is). This appears to be the beginning of a story - a man embittered by the death of his wife due to the unbending rules of a device. The only thing is, he has to do something now or it seems almost pointless. I could be wrong though, depending on where you take this in the next episode, I'm just uncertain on how you will fit in a meaningful plot in the next one.
On the flash - great animation and graphics, voice acting was decent. Remember that the plot has to go somewhere, that's the thing you need most here as far as I can tell.
I make movies the way I feel like it, so wether there's a plot or not, I just want to finish telling a story I made up.
But somehow, I can guarantee you, the story of Red is to allow the story to grow towards the plot.
Can't wait for Part 3 :)
Don't you just love it when someone who hasn't contributed anything decide to write lengthy essays (see below) about how "bad" a brilliant flash is? It's like a homeless bum saying that Beethoven is no good because "EVERYBODY plays the piano".
Anyway, the animation and voice acting once again were very good, and the plot, while old-fashioned, never gets old. It's a shame our hero didn't flip out right then, but I'd love to see what happens in Part 3.
what the hell
the animation was good but dude where is the f*cking plot i do not get the story you can do better
I think you should spend less time fapping to hentai and more time putting some actual plot structure into your flash. The animation is fine but it is pretty apparent that your story is lacking in ingenuity. And yes, the glove thing may not have been done before but aside from that, the story seems like every other typical cop story I've seen.
-the device is too powerful... (he is basically a god) by having an unbeatable weapon on the "good" side, you set up a story that is already bound to be completely uninteresting since there is no contest.
-you haven't really developed any characters...
-he could have saved his wife in an unfathomable amount of ways- I would have just created a baseball sized tumor in the "bad" guys head.... or make a diamond shield between her and the enemy... or make an extremely powerful magnet that would snatch away the gun or... or fill the gun with cheese.. etc.
-you spend all this time developing why the glove can't be taken unless under very specific circumstances when you could have just had it under the control of the "boss" (it seems like you are flaunting your "scientific" knowledge of adrenaline... why not heart rate, sweat, or any other simpler means of tension detection)
-the device would never be trusted to some agent or cop, more likely it would be in hands of scientists in some secret dwelling
Anyways, reason why I wrote this much is because I hate to see someone waste their time on something so ludicrous (which I am probably doing by writing this... meh). You should start over, you do the animating (which I'll say again is good, probably the only reason why you have a decent score), I do the script... (jks). And please don't respond by saying the next episode is going to be better... or have some sort of explanation, because there is nothing you can do that will rectify your mistakes... except starting over.
I am aware of the faults in the storyline; but that's how the story is.
Can't comprehend why people always whine about "no character development" or "plot".
I just tell a story I like, if you don't like it, that's your problem, no one needs to blame me for that.
That's my way of telling a story. Let's say, the story is an excuse for me to animate.
There is also no point in telling me to animate or not, let's describe it in the language you would understand: your review is as worthless as my story.
You also need to understand, the device is no thing that can manipulate an object out of nothing... It just uses the atom to create something out of the same material, but in another form.
Bragging about adrenaline? Oh come on... That's so ridiculous, it seems like you're looking up to me like if I'm a genius. You said it yourself, it's nothing that special, why would I be cocky about something like that?
Wouldn't you say the same if I had used heartbeat?
Nevertheless, I WILL improve on the movies, but I need time, meaning that I need more episodes.
an animation about the /v/ board on 4chan.
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