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Well, as this is my first submission to newgrounds... I hope you enjoy it... Please review, and if you have something bad to say about it... then please make it as good as possible lol. Any way, hope you enjoy it.

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Hmmm...

You got some general talent, work on it a bit. Try to put a real story line in you next flash, even if its as crazy and unpredictable as this one. The animation needs a tad of work, but it flows well and is smooth, if a bit slow. All in all you got the basics down and you gonna keep getting better the more you practice and do. And don't be afraid of posting your stuff on here, most people will try to give you the best advise they can. Keep working at it.

Meh.

It was okay, but for your second one I recommened you put a little more thought into the movie though.

Man-in-a-bush responds:

Ok, ill think of that when i make the next one

man-in-a-bush

OK here's your score.

Ok, the animation was ok just work on that a bit more also work on special effects and sound. Other than that this was a really good flash

Strangely amusing

im not sure why that was funny to me but damn sure was

It was adequate

The point I noticed most was the lack of overall flow, the worst case being the cars in the background. Two cars allegedly hit each other, but nothing beyond that occurred. Also, the pauses between characters when speaking with one another seemed to be oddly distant, more like they were talking to themselves rather than another person.

Your graphics could use some improvement as well, but I think you got the general ideas across.

You got video length correctly for a short, where I didn't feel like it was dragging or ending too suddenly.

Overall, I think there is much for you to improve upon, but at least it is possible for you to improve.

Credits & Info

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Faves:
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Votes
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Score
3.45 / 5.00

Uploaded
Oct 16, 2007
7:38 AM EDT