Good
The graphic were good. The plot was decent, but the audio did not match what was going on during the flash. It went way to fast and left a quarter of the flash with out audio.
Author Comments
Sorry about the sound if its off then yea...its my first time using flash to upload videos and yea, i would like if you gave me tips or helped me out with it so yea... Enjoy! ... for better verson go to http://www.youtube.com/wa tch?v=ZA7PiZm5b50
It was alright, but lacked emotion!
I know it wasn't intentional that the sound disappeared, but it kinda sucked without it! You need to add a bit more emotion when you're voicing your characters too, they also sounded the same making it harder to tell who was speaking! It also got very laggy and choppy so I think you should look into that. And sorry, but I can't really be bothered watching it on YouTube too. More emotion is key though, otherwise it loses a lot!
Ok, it is a start!
It was okay, however, like you stated at the top, my audio had cut off, and it doesn't seem like something that would be on newgrounds.
Not that good.
It had potential to be a good movie/flash/whatever but it just doesn't suite being freeze framed(?) in my opinion if i had been made a cartoon it would have been faster and more tension in a good way.