In this epic adventure, Strawberry meets up with his good buddy BananaClock. They proceed on an adventure around the world to find Strawberry's watch. Watch as this landmark first episode chronicles the death of Mozilla in perfect Broadway fashion. Enjoy!
Okay.
Here are a few suggestions to improve:
1. Add a sky. I mean whats the point of there being grass with no sky.
2. Lower Strawberrys Pitch. Somewhere in the middle should be good
3. Speed up Bananas voice a wee bit.
4. Practice on animating a little.
Overall, this is off to a good start just fix it up and you got yourself a Flash! (wow I'm never really this constructive in my reviews)
P.S. Plz reply to this. I think you'll find all of this usefull.
Sorry, I haven't looked at the reviews lately. Thank you for the suggestions, for the next one, I am slowing down the process, just to make sure the movie is good. About the sky, lol, I will add one. :p
Needs more
More of everything really - The traditional way of indicating a clock is talking is the kite-shaped icon which wobbles in time with the speech. I think it would make the animation look a whole lot better than making the characters wobble for the same purpose.
It needs finishing. After all, you've only produced 450k of file, so leaving it like that doesn't really qualify it as a full episode, with SBC being a spoilt brat and fucking with Banana's yo-yo.
I know it feels a little bit like desperation, trying to submit the file quickly, but if you could hold back for a week or two, you would be able to get a quality piece submitted, with better reviews and a higher score.
When will you have the next episode ready?
[Review Request Club]
The next episode will be arriving A.S.A.P. I cannot guarantee better graphics, for I am not that good of an artist in flash. However, I will try my best to improve the graphics, and I will change the talking to the kite shaped object. The next one will be longer, please not the first was just the beginning to find out what is going on.
Good but short
A nice little flash, a little random but with a nice story to it.
Graphics were simple, and very tweened. And it would be nice to see them improved for the next part, but still they're quite good.
Audio was simple, but nothing wrong with the trade mark clock Speakonia voices
All in all a nice start too a series, but there's room for improvement. Look forward to seeing the next one
~Review Request Club~
lol
this was funny. but it was short.
I'll admit I voted 3 to find out what happens next
It could be quite good, but it was far too short, and didn't make me laugh! It also needs a replay button, I wasn't going to wait 'til the song finished to see if one came up! I don't know what to think though, did it make sense?
lol, ironically speaking, no. Considering Strawberry is already a clock, however, that's the whole point. I am making a series so as it progresses hopefully it will be more enjoyable. :)